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by Michael Webb   Maelstrom  >

  

"Raymond sighed."

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"Raymond watched the sun making geometric patterns on his rug."

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"Raymond woke up with a start."

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(They say Hemingway wrote the opening of "A Farewell To Arms" 70 times. Who knows if that's true, but every word works. "In the late summer of that year" is so perfect. Not just summer, but late summer. Every adult has an ancestral fear of fall.)

"Raymond didn't know what to say."

(Writing is like that old joke about a carved wooden ship – it starts as a block of wood, and the instructions say, remove all the pieces that don't look like a ship. You know what the story is, it's so clear, so vivid, just tell it.)

(Just do it.)

"Raymond jumped when he heard her cry out."

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(You’re not going to get this right, are you?)

 “Raymond didn’t think he could do it.”

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"Raymond watched the sun making geometric patterns on his rug."

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(It’s killing you, but the vision of the way it’s supposed to look won’t leave you alone until you write it.)

"Raymond sighed."

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published 5 October 2011